Don't fret! Your application has potential, but it's not all the way there yet. Before a full judgement can be made, we'd like to see the following changes made to your application as it exists now:
▢ The magic you've listed has potential! But I do have some questions/concerns:
- Is there a catalyst for being able to do this? Can Sorey simply think of a person and achieve this magic, or will he need to touch a person or something else to pull this off?
- How does this magic affect the character in question? I see it says that it can affect the space to affect the person, but can they enter the space? Will they know of this space being created and that it has affected them? Just a few more details on how the other character involved can react to this magic is helpful for assessing the magic itself and is useful for the characters who you'll use this magic later on.
- I suggest putting a limit on how many people can enter these spaces and also how long they can stay up. There can definitely still be some shenanigans involving someone entering this space accidentally and the like, but some rules that further limit how this magic work can help to constrain the power and also help to avoid taking too many liberties with another person's character.
Please respond with the corrections or response within response within 48 hours. Also, feel free to ask for clarification on any points.
REVISION REQUEST
▢ The magic you've listed has potential! But I do have some questions/concerns:
- Is there a catalyst for being able to do this? Can Sorey simply think of a person and achieve this magic, or will he need to touch a person or something else to pull this off?
- How does this magic affect the character in question? I see it says that it can affect the space to affect the person, but can they enter the space? Will they know of this space being created and that it has affected them? Just a few more details on how the other character involved can react to this magic is helpful for assessing the magic itself and is useful for the characters who you'll use this magic later on.
- I suggest putting a limit on how many people can enter these spaces and also how long they can stay up. There can definitely still be some shenanigans involving someone entering this space accidentally and the like, but some rules that further limit how this magic work can help to constrain the power and also help to avoid taking too many liberties with another person's character.
Please respond with the corrections or response within response within 48 hours. Also, feel free to ask for clarification on any points.